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Don't look.                 don't          even          try.
He'll beat you.
He will drink.
Don't look.

Don't look.              She          isn't          sick          like          you
She won't care.
won't even try.
Don't look.

If you were drunk, you deserved it.

Have lots of sex.
DO NOT BE A SLUT
You are such a prude.

If he wanted it, you deserved it.

Always wear a bra.
Don't let anyone see it
Slut

If you looked, you deserved it.
Don't look.

Be thin. I don't care how.
Be fit.
     Stay at home.
    be independent
Don't tell anyone when he gives you bruises.
Don't tell anyone when she holds you down.
Don't choke on it.

If you got pregnant, it is your fault.
Slut.

If you weren't awake to say no, you  deserved it.

Wear a dress.
Don't show too much skin.
"I want to see those tits, baby."
Don't look. Don't speak. They'll go away. Maybe.
If you aren't interested, you deserved it.

Be overqualified. They won't hire you.
Don't         even         try.
Don't                     even                    look.

Always carry a weapon.
Assault earns more time than rape
than           abuse
        than            being          a         woman

"Show me your legs"
Your media-perfect legs.

If you smiled, you deserved it.

There are women who have learned to extort their bodies.
We hate them.
Slut
They deserve it.

Don't breathe. Breathe, and you waste.
"God, you women are so expensive."

You'll want kids one day, even if it kills you. Even if you don't.

"Let me change your mind."
NO
"You really mean yes."
NO

As a woman I have learned,
the state only cares about me before I'm born
or if I'm pregnant.

As a woman I have learned
nothing is my own choice.

As I live I've learned
not everyone knows the Girl Scout Law
and how it deemed me
    too feminine to learn how to tie a knot.
I don't know why society thinks
I'd like to lay down and take it
that I enjoy being told
I am nothing except
a receptacle for its semen
and a birth canal for its culture

I am done being told  I deserve it.
Edit June 1st, 2013 I simply cannot keep up with these comments. I'm overwhelmed by the response this has gotten, and I'm overwhelmed by the kindness I've seen. Thank you all so much. It really makes everything worth writing when I see that I've touched as many people as I have. I will try to answer as much as I can, but if you have a specific question, it might be better to note, seeing as I'm still getting comments and it is incredibly hard for me to keep up with. Thank you all for all the favorites and comments! My first DD, guys, I am crying. <3

Edit May 30th, 2013: Thank you so, so much for all your kind words on this. I will try to keep everything in order with this and answer all of your questions. Thanks for all the favorites, they mean a lot. This is what keeps me at it, all of you, so thanks. <3

Full title: Things I Have Learned About Being a Woman (From High School Health Class)
Most triggers apply.
I got angry. I wrote.
(The spacing here may be odd, but that's because dA sucks with it's formatting. Sorry 'bout that)
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Given 2013-06-01
Things I Have Learned About Being a Woman by =Marashete packs a punch with a final line that will resound in your person regardless of your sex. ( Suggested by TwilightPoetess and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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Oh my goodness Gracious this is a deep, Culture-shocking piece! I usually don't see great free verses with slashed out words or caps but they fit perfectly in. What really catches the eye is how the poem's words are structured, the crossed out swears, the large spaces between "Don't Even try". As a Rather feminist person this is showing an unequal world what it's like to be a woman and how society will judge you if you are pregnant or not a perfect image. What gets me the best is the use of "You deserved it" In some verses. When something like getting drunk or being beaten or such happens, all fingers point at the women in the case. I adore this poem, Amazing work!
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The style of the verse was a perfect support for the tone and message. The phrasing of the words and sentences was choppy, fragmented, abrupt... which set the tone for a narrator who had been previously terrorized into silence, and and only NOW driven to speak due to frustrated desperation.

I'd like to see more pieces that deal with other types of relationships and bonds that women can form. This poem largely covers the issues of women and sex, therefore mostly touching on a woman's relationship with the 'romantic other'. It would also be interesting to see other types of bonds explored, such as the relationship with other female friends, with mothers/fathers, with children.

Overall, a beautiful piece of work that skillfully summarizes harsh and ugly criticism to the hypocrisy with which women are viewed and treated in a patriarchal society.
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XeonartOmega Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Even to this day...gender equality....is still...so low
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XxJennaKittyxX Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I'm not gonna try to say I've felt your pain, because honestly I've no idea what you've gone through. But for whatever it's worth, and i hope it helps, I've seen my friends, my sister, my mother and  myself in such a sordid place. I wish i hadn't, and i'm sorry for everything it's caused you. But your poetry is amazing and beautiful despite the truth it exposes. Thank you for writing this. :'(
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ActsofArt Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
maybe if we voice the sentiment enough someone will actually listen. (but I doubt it)
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:iconmarashete:
Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Student General Artist
The goal is to make people listen.
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Flamecloud Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you.
Thank you.
I wrote something close to this, and read it for a class project in English
and got into trouble, because it had "swear words"
and yet, the boy who wrote a poem which joked about: rape, abuse, and blow jobs, got an A
It has to be said somewhere
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow. That's ridiculous, I'm sorry that happened to you.

Thank you :)
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larrylive Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
bravo
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:iconmarashete:
Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you!
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adventuretimefan190 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This gave me chills, and it also angered me as a female. I am asexual, but people can't accept that someone is not interested in sexual activity. BECAUSE EVERYONE LOVES SEX. :steamed:

This makes me sick, as in it impacted me very deeply. It's just amazing and empowering. :pat:
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Student General Artist
Like anyone's orientation affects you personally! Yes, that angers me too.

Thank you!
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1500 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
Bold, powerful ending.
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:iconmarashete:
Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you!
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eschatus Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
Simply put, stunning!
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:iconmarashete:
Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you!
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Miron86 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm a teacher, would you mind if I showed that poem to my students? Of course I'd tell them who the author is.
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:iconmarashete:
Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Of course, thank you! :)
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Miron86 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks :)
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kaiti-sukai Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
This made me physically sick... really hard to read. Of course, that means it was really well written.
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Student General Artist
thank you :)
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NamieDanielle Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
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:iconmarashete:
Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student General Artist
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
Congratulations on the well deserved DD!
I hope you have a fantastic day!
:huggle:
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:iconmarashete:
Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you! And same to you :)
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
You're welcome :D
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stardustkitty Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm so happy to read something like this, they expect so much... If you fail they all hate you. It's not fair. Especially the whole having children thing. That's something I've experienced. They tell me, "When you grow older you'll learn to love babies." "You just don't understand that it's normal." "You're supposed to!" Call me a bad person if you want but I really can't stand babies and children yet it's crammed down my throat everyday. When I get enough money I'm getting my "tubes tied" just so I can be positive that I proved them wrong.
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Savoci Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I loved this. Well done!
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:iconmarashete:
Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you :)
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PreussenSauce Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I finally find a Daily Deviation worth looking at. This is truly beyond what I expected and you have perfectly depicted the struggles and losses women suffer all the time. People need to understand that women are most definitely NOT semen receptacles. No one will ever understand that fully, and I don't know why. I know tons of women who are a million times stronger than some men I know, both physically and mentally. The frustration in being a woman is unbearable, but there is hope.
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you :)
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VSIS Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
And yet, to this day, women are viewed as semen receptacles.

But this is a pretty damn good start, if not a very damn good start.
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student General Artist
I think so, too. You just gotta keep getting heard, keep having a voice. They can't ignore you forever.
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kanzeNatsume Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Student Filmographer
This is amazing! I'm probably not from where you are but this piece speaks out for women everywhere. Thank you for writing this piece <3

Ever since I turned 16 my family became 'particular' or outspoken about my figure and they way I dress. They said its time I should start looking like a woman, no more kiddy stuff. I dress the way I want but the comments are still there. That I'm not pretty enough to be attractive EVER.

There are times that I DO want to dress up but I'm scared that I'll be assaulted on the streets. It happens everyday. Whether you're a pretty girl or an old lady it happens. As long as there's a hole to put their dicks in, it'll do. You're lucky enough to come out alive because most of the times they kill you after they're done with you.

Your piece is so honest and provoking that it reminds of how unfair it is for women. Recently my college schedule dictated us to go home at 9pm. Well! Good luck to all women for coming home alive!
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you :)

I'm from the U.S.

My family does the same to me, but it started when I turned 13-ish. Dad started making some comments about what I was eating, how much I was eating, and what I was wearing. It's not constructive. It's not encouraging. It's terrifying. I wasn't ready physically or emotionally to be thrust into womanhood. A doctor told my cousin once when she was 11-12, that she needed to do some Dance Dance Revolution to lose some weight. I've never understood the focus we have on women's figures, like it makes any difference to YOUR life what happens with MY body.

I hope you stay safe, friend. It can't be easy but hopefully, for you, things will change for the better. Good luck

Thank you
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kanzeNatsume Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student Filmographer
I hope so too. Just to be on the safe side, I'm going to save up for a taser or a pepper spray...or a butterfly knife.

I don't deserve it xD
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Save up for self-defense, if you can take any classes where you live. Way, way more valuable than a weapon, which can cause more harm to you than good.
Knowing how to get out of a situation is much better than having to resort to a weapon, in my opinion, but one of those (butterfly knife/taser/pepper spray) probably isn't a bad thing to have too XD

Don't deserve what?
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kanzeNatsume Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student Filmographer
I self study some self defense moves since I don't really have the time for classes right now xD

and what I mean by I don't deserve is
I don't deserve whatever ill thing that happens to me because I'm a tiny girl walking down the street at 10pm :I
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Some study is better than none.
:)

No one deserves that, regardless of size, clothing, or gender.
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FellitoRockero Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
It's been long since I read about expression and contempt towards the actual state of society. It's true one has to fight it, change it, starting with oneself.

Perhaps, what upsets me is to see people excusing on tropes to justify their habits and manners. It sickens me. Once, it made me feel most upset when someone seemed to lost faith in everything just for being texted for her breasts, needless to say what the message was about. I hated too see how bad she was treated, yet I knew I had no control over what I saw or read. It's ironic and angering to find out on the limits of the net this way.

Either way, the best we can do is to be what we learnt and pass the wave to those around us, everyday in our lives.
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Yes, exactly. Thank you :)
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DeRaza360 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This put me off foot, and makes me rethink over my beliefs and morals. Fewer and fewer things do that as I grow more experienced, thus I respect the things which still have the capability to do so.
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Solstice2013 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hell freakin' yeah, women's rights FTW.
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Starwonderer117 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
As a man, I do understand how women are treated by society and some have stereotyped themselves to make them look attractive. Even I know women are people, I just don't understand the small things that separates men from women.

There is really nothing wrong with not being perfect, not being attractive in my opinion, as a man, I should respect a woman and treat her like a person. It's about the inside that counts that everyone needs to learn from each other: personality, belief, the very heart of the person matters, even if it is hard to do than to think about.
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Every person has a story, a secret, and something that makes them feel like a child again.
We have to remember that what causes pain in someone causes pain for a specific reason, and the fact that we don't feel any pain from it doesn't diminish or lessen their pain.
There is nothing wrong with being imperfect because there is literally no such thing as a perfect human being.
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Starwonderer117 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
Exactly. I'm glad you acknowledge that. It's a great poetry you wrote and it means a lot, I mean A LOT! Stay who you are ok Marashete?
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student General Artist
:D I shall try. Same to you!
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Starwonderer117 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
Thanks. ;)
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MyLittlePeasant Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I adore this darling, simply perfect
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keidream Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
This is really powerful.
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daemen9 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
I simply don't know what to say, I'm speechless it left me on and emotional rollercoaster
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ZaTanya Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My own mother tells me that I'm not girly enough, or that I'm too weird or immature to be taken out in public. She's always ragging on me because I'm not social enough and I don't have enough friends.
However, if I showed this to her, she'd only get on my case more. Because she doesn't want me speaking out for myself.

This is a really well-written piece. So well-written, in fact, that it really hits close to home and relates closely to me. Well done! :heart:
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