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Show me another way to think.

Show me a paved corridor through the dungeon of my mind.

I want to watch you form words with your lips;
See them take root in your mind and spread up through your throat
and bloom from your tongue. Show me you know what I mean.
Show me a new puzzle, someone I haven't figured out yet.
[link]

This is a happy end
Cause' you don't understand
Everything you have done
Why's everything so wrong

This is a happy end
Come and give me your hand
I'll take your far away.

I'm a new soul
I came to this strange world
Hoping I could learn a bit about how to give and take
But since I came here
Felt the joy and the fear
Finding myself making every possible mistake
La-la-la-la-la-la-la-la...
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:icontoxic-nebulae:
toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
I love the imagery in this, but I wish the punctuation were a bit more consistent.
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:iconmarashete:
Marashete Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you! Yes, I agree. It undermines the flow.
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:iconthreedayweekend:
threedayweekend Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012   Writer
I think this is an interesting read. Thanks for sharing it.
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:iconmarashete:
Marashete Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Student General Artist
and thanks for your feedback :)
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:iconthreedayweekend:
threedayweekend Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012   Writer
Yeah, I'll have to "watch" you. I enjoyed several of your pieces.
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:iconmarashete:
Marashete Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow, thank you so much! :)
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