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i.
i want to dig the crevices of my heart clean,
wash it in a cool stream, hand it to you like it's new.
i'll stitch the broken seams and ignore the film over my eyes.
but i know that you would never accept that.
you want to run your fingers through the scars and solve the maze
you don't want just the good parts, or the masks, or the band aids.
you don't need the film that covers my eyes.
you want openness, a shared burden; you need a hiding place

ii.
there exists a certain kind of emptiness, a hunger,
that comes with thinking alone and breathing in dusty air.
it is bone deep and aching, a sickness that holds no remedy
but company; twined limbs, soft words, and Earl Grey.
the worst thing to be is alone. i am wrapped in soft fleece
over bony arms. cradling myself, it is almost enough.

iii.  
hold my hand.  we can't say we've never given anything.
freckles make a lovely pattern, tracing them with soft fingertips
a quiet smile is shared and that alone heals.

iv.
dear
mother,
if this is a mistake, let it be made.
Please.
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All this life is all for love
It's the only road I'll choose
And every street and avenue
Only one will lead me to you

All of me is all for you
You're all I see
All of me is all for you
You're all I need

One Love, One Love, One Love


I was given a wonderful song prompt by =TwilightPoetess
here: [link]

This was amazing fun and I hope to do more of this :)
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
Wow, amazing. That last part really punched me in the face. Kudos!
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! :heart:
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
You're very welcome! :hug:
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really, really lovely. I adore the half-rhyme you have going in the first and second stanzas, and how beautifully they flow. I feel like the third and fourth stanzas, though, don't quite belong here--like you felt the piece wasn't finished where it was, and added on to make it feel complete. They aren't bad stanzas, don't get me wrong--I really LOVE the way you worded the fourth--but they don't quite match the rest of this piece, either. Lovely, lovely work overall! :heart:
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Marashete Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you! I actually took freckles make a lovely pattern, tracing them with soft fingertips
a quiet smile is shared and that alone heals.
from the second stanza because it didn't fit, but I see what you mean by the third and fourth not fitting. This is a work in progress, like everything I have.

Funnily enough, the third and fourth stanzas were written about half an hour after the first and seconds, so that might account for some of the misshapen flow.
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TwilightPoetess Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahhhh, yes, the time lapse would do something with the flow. :nod:
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